The Building
From A Fear of Mine

The Preamble
Big buildings with little or no windows disconcert or scare me. This is the inspiration for the following story. I wasnât sure how I could play this out but then in a dream state I took it the recently closed Vocal Challenge which you can see below. Of course this is too late, but wouldnât have made the cut anyway (thatâs just a joke)
The Building
Some guy out taking his dog for a walk in the park saw it first, a forty or fifty foot tall square brick building with a pyramidal roof. It had no windows or doors and it wasnât there yesterday. He wondered if the council or army had put it up, but there was no sign of any work being done.
He walked round the construction to make sure there was really no places of ingress or egress. He thought there may be an underground tunnel, but again there did not seem to be anything that would indicate that there was an actual tunnel.
He put the dog back on its lead and started to walk away. He looked back and saw a man who looked like his neighbour walking towards the building and then disappear into the wall.
What the hell?
He went back to the place that his neighbour had disappeared and it was just solid brick. He pushed against it but it would not give. He shouted but the sound probably wouldnât carry through the brick.
Arriving home he made a cup of tea and fed the dog. Then he went and knocked on his neighbourâs door. No answer. He was slightly concerned but who could he report it to? Also was it actually his neighbour? He had to go to work, but decided he would go back the next day to check the building, and if his neighbour was still absent he would call the police, and they might be able to tell him something about the building.
The Next Morning
Back out to the park, and the building was gone! There was no sign of anything ever having been there. The park was just a park. There was no building.
He came back home and gave his neighbour a knock, there was still no answer. If he called the police could he say what he had seen without sounding absolutely mad? I saw my neighbour disappear into a brick wall of a big brick building in the park that has now disappeared. Yeah that would sound credible.
He did phone the police but didnât mention the building. They took the details and put his neighbour on file as a potential missing person.
Within The Walls
He was confused, he had just walked through a brick wall in an absolute trance. He knew something was wrong but he didnât know what. He tried to get out but he was surrounded by four solid brick walls.
Then they spoke:
Wall 1: âYour sins have brought you hereâ
Wall 2: âYou will here your faults before you are released into Hellâ
Wall 3: âThis is the place of divine judgementâ
Wall 4: âYou have been found undeserving of further lifeâ
Wall 1: âYou have been condemned to eternal tormentâ
Him: âWhy what have I doneâ
Wall 2: âLast week you beat up a young man and hospitalised himâ
Him: âIt was his own fault, he shouldnât been thereâ
Wall 3: âYou were stalking your friends daughter and she has ended up needing treatmentâ
Him: âShe deserved it, sheâs a slutâ
Wall 4: âYou stole money from some residents of the care home near youâ
Him: âItâs their own fault, they should be more careful and not leave their stuff where it can be stolenâ
Wall 1: âYou threatened them with violence if they did not give you their possessionâ
Him: âWell thatâs their own fault, they should not allow themselves to be threatenedâ
Wall 2: âWe could go on forever, we have scratched the surface of your despicable deeds and you have shown no sign of remorseâ
Wall 3: âWe are finished with youâ
And with that the walls dissolved and he was plunged, deservedly into eternal fire
Back On Earth
The neighbour never did come back and the building was never seen again. The neighbour's house was cleared by a charity and then put up for rent.
Some people in the street felt a little safer and easier.
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Comments (5)
This could be expanded Mike. Great concept!
I see a lot of hidden things in this, that snuck up on me after the fact! GREAT read! Very sneaky-uppy. LOL!! Love it! â€ïž
Whoaaa, this was a very fascinated concept! I wish that building really existed!
Nicely done.
Really nice one. Intriguing to think He'll on Earth was a windowless building. I'm going to steer clear of brick walls with no windows. Lol I love how your stories remind me of a show called The Twilight Zone hosted by Rod Serling. Great job.